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On Strong Blood
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:date: 2019-01-15T12:00:56
:status: draft
:category: literature
:tags: review, harryPotter, blogComment
(my comments on “`Strong Blood`_” by CooLibrarian)
This is really interesting and very uncommon (which is meant as
a compliment). Couple of things to note:
1. Too long and too convoluted. We are in the chapter 39 and it
feels like the proper plot line of story starts only now.
Previous chapters were nice reading, but there was still that
feeling “And what’s the point of this story?”. Also, it seems
like you made your families and relationships so convoluted
that aside from people using complicated computer programs
just to keep afloat in the endless stream of names and
relationships, you himself feel like giving up, and the last
couple of changes there is no proper story (with dialogs,
situations, etc.), but just a summary of the plot. As with
almost every fanfiction severe cutting down would be helpful.
2. I am a practising Christian myself, so I always enjoy
fanfiction stories where heroes are believers themselves. So,
it is lovely to see all those families of faithful Orthodox
believers. Except, this is classical example of “show, don’t
tell”. How does their faith presents themselves to the world,
aside from all baptisms and funerals? Is it something more
than that? Why to introduce all that concept of everybody
being Orthodox (and it is possible for all Russian family),
when it plays no role in the story itself?
Since I first read Sirius Black was a godfather of Harry,
I couldn’t loose from my mind an image of Sirius in the
medieval church of Saint Jerome in Godric’s Hollow. Seems
a bit surreal. Perhaps it was just very formal and unfeeling
ceremony for Potters, but what if it wasn’t? Lily praying for
the God’s protection from Voldemort? Or would she rather pray
for strength to do what’s right and not just what’s easy? It
seems like Lily Potter was very thoughtful and honest person,
would she submit to doing just formal ceremony for the sake of
being “as others are”? That feels more like Petunia, doesn’t
it? All those Christians, did they ever feel remorse, ask for
forgiveness, forgiving? It would be interesting.
And no, I truly don’t ask for copy of “Hogwarts School of
Prayer and Miracles”, that is an abomination!
.. _`Strong Blood`:
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/7211094
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