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Augurey or loosing of sanity
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:date: 2019-08-28T16:51:33
:category: faith
:tags: review, harryPotter, blogComment, fromReddit
(my comments on “`The Augurey`_” by La Matrona, originally
published on Reddit_)
What is my pet-peeve is when the characters behave like idiots
just to keep the plot together. Let’s see. I have just deleted
“The Augurey” from my computer.
First of all, just let me state, I have nothing serious against
Harmony. I probably prefer Hinny, just because I don’t feel like
going against canon when not necessary, and because Northumbrian
and “`Inner Demons by serendipity_50`_” have shown me it can be
done well, but otherwise it doesn’t bother me. For example,
“`Escape by SingularOddities`_” is a rather decent story (I wrote
a review_ of it). So, it is not that.
SPOILERS AHEAD, so please skip if it bothers you (and it doesn’t
make sense to mark everything as a spoiler, not much will make
sense without them).
It is not even the original premise of the story. The Trio while
still hiding in the Grimmauld Place finds out through the Family
Black Tree wallpaper (finally somebody found some good use for
it!) that Delphini happened (after all, Bellatrix was Black
originally). Harry, having a soft heart for orphans, finds her
after the war (completely neglected and abused), saves her and
brings her as his own. I have never heard about it before, and it
could lead to a nice story. So, it is not the basic plot either.
What bothers me, is **how** it is done. Harry for reasons nobody
ever explained (and which don’t make sense either) decides to
hide his wish to look for Delphini from everybody (including and
especially from Ginny; it looks like the only reason is to make
a tension between them, which could lead to their break up). Then
he asks (only!) Hermione for help, and finally he breaks in in
the middle of night to the house where Delphini lives hidden,
takes her away, and presumably kills her neglectful foster mother
(he “takes care of her” in rage after finding out how horribly
Delphini was neglected). Then he brings her to the Grimmauld
Place, where Hermione finds a book on the paediatric care and
cures her. So, to summarize, Harry (who still planned to be an
officer of the law at that point) just committed completely
useless breaking and entering, abduction of a baby, murder, and
non-reporting of crime, and I wonder whether not-bringing her to
St. Mungo for professional help does not constitute a criminal
neglect as well. What’s Hermione’s reaction? She doesn’t report
him to the law officers, but she gushes about his big heart and
how great a man he is. Sorry, I thrown the story away in that
moment, so I don’t know how it continued.
There are zillion other things he can do (even if the existence
of Delphini should stay hidden from the wizarding world), just to
mention the first idea which came to my mind, he can ask for help
his buddy The Minister for Magic, there is zero reasons to keep
this whole thing hidden from Ginny and other Weasleys.
There are many decent ways how to break up with your girlfriend
decently, and there are many possible reasons which could be
found. I can happily imagine that after Ginny haven’t heard about
him for a year fallen apart for the biggest hero of them all,
Neville. I can imagine Hermioine deciding that after all her
affection towards Ron was more curiosity or wish to have her
first crush completed than true love (no, Hermione not forgetting
Ron his leave after being cursed by the locket makes as much
sense as anybody accusing Ginny of bringing the basilisk to the
castle, i.e. none at all). So, I believe even post-War Harmony
can be written in a reasonable manner (I tried to make
a suggested talk between Hermione and Ron in “`Late Morning
Talks`_” to show how I would do it). However, the author was lazy
and he just wanted to to get to the Harmony cooing over small
baby as easily as possible, so he went straight ahead. Grrr.
.. _`The Augurey`:
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12310861/1/
.. _Reddit:
http://www.reddit.com/r/HPfanfiction/comments/cj5w7b/what_are_you_least_favorite_cliches_in_the_fandom/evbm3bb?context=3
.. _`Inner Demons by serendipity_50`:
https://archiveofourown.org/works/601124
.. _`Escape by SingularOddities`:
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11916243/1/
.. _review:
{filename}singularoddities-review-escape.rst
.. _`Late Morning Talks`:
https://archiveofourown.org/works/20141410
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