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diff --git a/faith/breakfast_in_new_york.rst b/faith/breakfast_in_new_york.rst deleted file mode 100644 index 87a278a..0000000 --- a/faith/breakfast_in_new_york.rst +++ /dev/null @@ -1,94 +0,0 @@ -Live like you are not a Christian -################################# - -:date: 2020-06-28T18:35:24 -:category: faith -:tags: review, harryPotter, blogComment, HPreligion - -(my comments on “`Breakfast in New York`_” by Radaslab) - -Finished reading the story and there are two overwhelming -thoughts in my head. The first is obvious and rather normal for -most of the fanfiction stories (and especially so-called romantic -ones): it should be cut to like one quarter or so. The plot is -not capable of carrying more like seven or eight chapters, but we -have thirty-one of them. If you write two-hundred thousand words -long story, there is always good testing question “Do I have -a plot as strong as `Moby Dick by Herman Melville`_, do I have -the same amount of action?” [#]_ OK, romance can have less -adventure than Moby Dick, but this story with its incredibly -repetitive in nature (where even Hermione gets so bored, she -obviously forgot Harry has already told her he was -a Roman-Catholic and they would have a wedding ordained by his -parish priest even telling her his name) with many long -descriptions of everything completely useless in terms of plot, -just goes on and on and on. Thank God it is so easy to skip over -huge amounts of boring stuff like that! (hint: from five days -between their engagement and the wedding, just gathering in the -park outside of Grimmauld Place and meeting at Dursleys’ carries -the plot, whole day of visiting Hogwarts and ZOO, which is like -two chapters, can be safely skipped) - -You know the advice (which the author didn’t follow at all) is -“Show, don’t tell!”, it is NOT “Show AND tell! And tell again -(while she contemplates the story), and again (while he does so), -and tell once more (she has to tell her mum), then decide that -you want to actually write epistolary letter, so instead of -rewrite, you just write whole things twice more in two sets of -letters! EEEEEEEEEEEEEEE! Makes me crazy. - -However, as I have described elsewhere_, lack of editing is -completely normal in the fanfiction world, and I wouldn’t write -this review just because of that. It is something else. In the -`religionless universe of Harry Potter`_, I am very thankful for -every even hint of some person who is a Christian, and who takes -her belief seriously. However, then there are stories like this -one and `Strong Blood by CooLibrarian`_, which are just -confusing. Main characters (and many other people) are Christians -(here Roman Catholics, in “Strong Blood” Russian Orthodox), but -there is absolutely nothing Christian about them. They never -pray, never go to the church, never read the Bible, never jump to -the unknown because God calls them to, anything. And no, I don’t -think it is the traditional Christians / born-again one’s thing. -I wouldn’t mind if they go to Masses, pray Rosary [#]_, wearing -devotional scapulars, anything. Why make your characters -expressly Christian, when they don’t do anything Christian-like? - -And I really don’t ask for some explicitly theological or -missionary stories. For example, `Why Time Travel Should Be -Illegal and Other Morals by mugglesftw`_ makes them normal -Christians, even though their faith is certainly not in the -centre of the story, it is just characteristic of some -characters, who are dealing with some other plot. - -.. [#] If your story has one million words, the question is - whether you want it to be as boring as `Clarissa by Samuel - Richardson`_, normally considered to be the longest novel in - the English literature. ;) - -.. [#] Actually, it is mentioned in “Breakfast in New York”, that - Hermione did pray Rosary during the Deathly Hallows camping - trip, and just by listening to her whispered prayers, Harry - converts to Christianity and only later finds out Potters were - as a family traditionally Catholics … no comments. - -.. _`Breakfast in New York`: - https://www.fanfiction.net/s/5141159 - -.. _`Moby Dick by Herman Melville`: - https://blog.fostergrant.co.uk/2017/08/03/word-counts-popular-books-world/ - -.. _elsewhere: - {filename}aristotle-unities.rst - -.. _`religionless universe of Harry Potter`: - {filename}religionless-hp.rst - -.. _`Strong Blood by CooLibrarian`: - https://www.fanfiction.net/s/7211094 - -.. _`Why Time Travel Should Be Illegal and Other Morals by mugglesftw`: - https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12738075 - -.. _`Clarissa by Samuel Richardson`: - https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/List_of_longest_novels |