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diff --git a/faith/breakfast_in_new_york.rst b/faith/breakfast_in_new_york.rst index 6523cf3..7ed0600 100644 --- a/faith/breakfast_in_new_york.rst +++ b/faith/breakfast_in_new_york.rst @@ -18,16 +18,16 @@ a plot as strong as `Moby Dick by Herman Melville`_, do I have the same amount of action?” [#]_ OK, romance can have less adventure than Moby Dick, but this story with its incredibly repetitive in nature (where even Hermione gets so bored, she -obviously forgot Harry has already told her he was Roman-Catholic -and they would have a wedding ordained by his parish priest even -telling her his name) and long descriptions of everything -completely useless in terms of plot, just goes on and on and on. -Thank God it is so easy to skip over huge amounts of boring stuff -like that! (hint: from five days between their engagement and the -wedding, just gathering in the park outside of Grimmauld Place -and meeting at Dursleys’ carries the plot, whole day of visiting -Hogwarts and ZOO, which is like two chapters, can be safely -skipped) +obviously forgot Harry has already told her he was +a Roman-Catholic and they would have a wedding ordained by his +parish priest even telling her his name) with many long +descriptions of everything completely useless in terms of plot, +just goes on and on and on. Thank God it is so easy to skip over +huge amounts of boring stuff like that! (hint: from five days +between their engagement and the wedding, just gathering in the +park outside of Grimmauld Place and meeting at Dursleys’ carries +the plot, whole day of visiting Hogwarts and ZOO, which is like +two chapters, can be safely skipped) However, as I have described elsewhere_, lack of editing is completely normal in the fanfiction world, and I wouldn’t write |